Finished as much of the first draft yesterday as I could get, and sat for a couple of hours with my guy batting ideas back and forth about how I could fix it. It was a great discussion, and I came away from it with clear direction and excitement: This is exactly what you want from the person who crits your work and then bounces ideas with you on how to improve it.
My job today is to start from scratch and rewrite the thing. Aiming for four thousand words total in the outline, and also aiming to get as many of them today as possible.