I’m sick…but I STILL kicked Bashtyk Nokyd’s ass

Bashtyk-Nokyd-Take-OneI couldn’t sleep last night because I couldn’t breathe last night. (Matt was sick for two weeks, the Kid has been sick for one, but is still sick—and now it’s my turn.

So I sat up all night writing.

I got 20 Sentences, which doesn’t seem like much until you realize that each Sentence is the condensed outline for one chapter, and that in one long sitting, I completely outlined the second version of Bashtyk Nokyd Takes The Longview.

What is going to survive from the first version?

The first line: As a gesture of rage and protest, I recently bought a pretty girl a fancy dress for her execution.

Having run the first version into the side of a mountain in a horrible train wreck of mythic proportions, I decided to take a different route this time.

But that is still a damn fine first line.

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By Holly

Novelist, writing teacher, on a mission to reprint my out-of-print books and indie-publish my new ones.

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8 years ago

Hope you feel better soon. Love the line.

8 years ago

Interesting first line. Yay for conquering it and using that inability to sleep for something wonderful.

8 years ago

Now you’ve gone and done it, Holly. You’ve shown us that sometimes you begin at the beginning and rip out nearly everything to begin again. And you did it without blinking an eye.

What an example; even while you’re sick and may be getting sicker, you stoop to this level of professionalism.

KUDOS, GIRL. Who-hoo!

Karen Guyler
8 years ago

Way to go, Holly! I have managed to train wreck a book not once but twice this year (even with HTTS and HTRYN in my pocket – a painful lesson learned) and have really struggled with the ‘what is wrong with me’, how can I have done it not once, but twice. It’s a revelation to see that it still happens to someone as skilled and experienced as you and really encouraging to see you wrangle it back. Gives me great hope for my rewrite number three!!
And indeed that is an awesome first line!

8 years ago

It’s a GREAT first line, IMO. Only problem is now that I know you’re chugging into the new draft, I’m hesitant about reading the broken one for class, LOL!

8 years ago

Woo hoo! I’m excited about this because I am champing at the bit for this next installment. And Mr. Pearannoyed has finally also read about both Cady and the Logview, and he has asked me more than once when the next story is coming out. So yeah – your fans are waiting. 😀

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