Finished Vipers’ Nest… Until I didn’t.

Sometimes you finish a book and you know you don’t quite have it.

I’d done my short version print-out, read-through revision of Longview 4: The Vipers’ Nest. Finished the story last Tuesday with 40,000-plus words, which made it officially a novel.

But back of the mind said, Don’t say anything. Not yet. You don’t have it right yet.

So I just sat on it, created a copy for my husband, and gave it to him the next day.

Matt read it. Since we got together, he’s been my first reader and content editor. He’s really, really good.

And he came back with the single comment that changed everything. “You’re trying to cram three books into one story, and this one has no single main character.”

Then he did the second thing he does. He asked me a question. “So how does Bashtyk Nokyd relate to the game?”

And I saw the answers.

So I’m going back to do a complete overhaul.

I’m going to be ripping out two thirds of the existing chapters to put in the NEXT story (or two), and drilling down to the main character of this story, who was also the main character in Longview 1: Born from Fire, (the guy on the cover) and I’m building out the tie between him and the way Bashtyk Nokyed played a video game to figure out how to save Settled Space.

Or at least the people who want to be saved.

 

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By Holly

Novelist, writing teacher, on a mission to reprint my out-of-print books and indie-publish my new ones.

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Amanda Truscott
5 years ago

I also have a partner who gives incredibly insightful feedback, but I don’t always accept it as gracefully as you’ve done here. I’ll try harder to follow your example:-)

Holly
Holly
Reply to  Amanda Truscott
5 years ago

😀 Twenty-two years of getting his crits has added considerable grace to my response.

So has the fact that when he points something out, he is ALWAYS freakin’ right.

He’s a highly intelligent, thoughtful reader, a really good writer, and knowledgeable about genre and story structure, pacing, character motivation, and a stack of other things.

And I used to get my feelings hurt by his crits fairly regularly (even while seeing that he was right) because, well… feelings.

Having his crits be far more useful than those of multiple commercial editors I worked with made things a bit easier.

Twenty-two years did, too. I appreciate him more now than I did when we were newer.

Amanda Truscott
Reply to  Holly
5 years ago

That makes sense:-)

Judy French
Judy French
5 years ago

Nice to have a mate than gives an honest critique.

Holly
Holly
Reply to  Judy French
5 years ago

Yup. Truly.

dragon
dragon
5 years ago

Sounds like things are going well. Looking forward to the story.

Tuff Gartin
5 years ago

I’ll be ready to read it when you feel you have it right. Kudos for having the courage to do a major overhaul!

Is Matt for hire?

Tuff Gartin
Reply to  Holly
5 years ago

Sorry. That was a lame attempt at humor on my part. I honestly didn’t think there was a chance he’d be for hire. Regardless, I’m not in a financial position with my writing to pay for these services right now anyway. I’ve sold a couple dozen copies of my first book. So I need to get my sales up (and more books out there) before I can consider outside resources for editing/revising. Right now I’m trying to do all of that myself.

Holly
Holly
Reply to  Tuff Gartin
5 years ago

No problem. 😀

Holly
Holly
Reply to  Tuff Gartin
5 years ago

Also, crowdsourcing crits can be a spectacular way of getting high-grade editing AND high-grade bug-hunting. Being a broke writer is no fun, but you can still put together pro-level fiction.

Tuff Gartin
Reply to  Holly
5 years ago

I’ve considered it but without any recommendation I did not do it for my first book. My main concern is that I not be happy with the result and then my schedule would be delayed even more. I have a busy schedule because I have a 50ish hour full time job too. Maybe I’m making the wrong decisions in an effort to get more books out there sooner rather than later? Have you ever had bad experiences with crowdsourcing crits, and if so, how much time did it set you back?

Tuff Gartin
Reply to  Holly
5 years ago

I think I mislead you. I should have said in my original post “…before I can consider PAID outside resources…”. I have two bug finders now. They are both family but they are very direct and tell me exactly how they feel. I made a decent-sized change in my first book from their feedback.

Anyway, I totally agree with your advice about getting other eyes. By the time I’m done revising it I’m so sick of the darn thing anyway I can’t fairly assess it any more lol.

It is my goal to get to 5 at some point. I just haven’t found others I trust yet. And to be honest, I want to get 5 OTHER THAN my family. I like your idea of setting up a request in the General Discussion forum. You gave me the nudge I needed.

Thanks.

Vanessa
Vanessa
5 years ago

I would rather have the book you love whenever it gets done than to hurry through and get something that’s not the story you want to tell. Oh, please don’t mistake me, I am waiting on the edge of my seat…but waiting isn’t the end of the world.

Misty DiFrancesco
Misty DiFrancesco
5 years ago

You are so lucky to have such a gifted partner/editor! Can’t wait to see the result!

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