I like this. I would love to write this. It has some cool POV tangles, and a nice element of scary-but-not-what-you-think that becomes even scarier when you know what’s really going on.
I think it will be tough to write — the balance between what the reader thinks he knows and the truth will be hard to maintain. But I really, really want to have the chance to fight my way through it.
Oh, yeah. Time to go work on copyedits.