It isn’t just that I didn’t get much written last night. I’ve discovered I really don’t like the bit I got.
So my notes for the night, in my attempt to get take two of this scene right:
Critical questions for “Out the service door” (I name my scenes on my index cards)…
1) Why does the hero retreat from Coat Guy? SHOW the threat.
2) Why does the hero pursue Aleksa? Show the need.